I want to be clear that I'm not saying 'hire an editor' or 'there's typos,' as some other reviewers have put it. Just like the child playing the concerto can be spirited and entertaining, this was spirited and entertaining. Doesn't consider how internal and external global shape can contrast to create dramatic tension

Lack of consideration of prose style (bonus points for reflecting mood or action) Lack of clear value shifts and turning points at the scene level When showing, chooses unimportant or common details Lack of motivation or tension to move the story forward

Here's a few consistent issues that come to mind (meaning they weren't typos). It shocks me that Bagwell didn't even look up basic things every grade-school student learns before hitting publish. A first-year creative writing course could use this book for an entire semester as an example of what not to do. Just like any profession, the art and craft of writing takes years of practice to get good at. This belongs on a personal webpage or in the hands of family and friends, or, at the very least, make it free on Amazon. That's kind of why it baffles me that people think it's okay to slap up the book they wrote on Amazon and charge people money for it. No one would dare try to represent someone in court without the years of necessary legal training. No one would dare put her on a stage and charge money as if she were a professional.ĭo you see where this is going? Let's take Travis Bagwell's own profession. It's a spirited and entertaining rendition, but far from professional. Your ten year old (non-prodigy) plays through a challenging violin concerto in the privacy of your home in front of family. Yikes! This better not be the best it has to offer. I did a bunch of research to find the 'best' place to get into the LitRPG genre. I'm not sure, but I'm doing one to counteract all the positivity.

With his reputation in the gutter and no prospects, he will face a choice regarding how he intends to blaze his path through the game.One stars, two stars. Meanwhile, Alex re-enters the game listless and angry after his loss against Jason. This act will lead to a chain of events that might ensure his city’s survival or create new enemies. His first task is to investigate the dark keep that looms over the city’s marketplace. He must assume the mantle of ruling an undead city – with everything that entails. Alfred has made a proposition that Jason isn't certain he should accept.Īfter the battle with Alexion, Jason has also been appointed as the Regent of the Twilight Throne.

It is the second book in the series.Ī few days have passed since Jason's confrontation with Alfred and he's debating whether to re-enter Awaken Online. Awaken Online: Precipice is a LitRPG novel by Travis Bagwell.

Catharsis by Travis Bagwell